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d'pak bhai kya karwa rahe ho nirmala se pls...........kuch to karo......bachao use in bhediyon se......ya phir maar dalo...........aap likhte huye to pata nahi par mai padhte huye ye sehan nahi kar paa raha hu.........plssssssssssss....................
Hatts Off to you Shakespeare002,

a well balanced act of words. I have followed your story from post one... and indeed wanted to put one of your post as quote to this post, after reaching the last post. But just could not stop myself from dropping this post in between, after reading post of brijand.

I indeed love the theme; the concept & the subject of your story, but am not enjoying the sexual urge (dont misunderstood me as being impatient) the story name promises of. Instead i am really feeling pity for nirmla, the story is rotating around the theme of "what nirmla faces" but that is not what i am looking for. Sorry being a naive in writing, if i sound to be improper with selection of my words ~ But would really like to see this story to move around with sex in mind & not with the pain in heart. Repeatedly it has happened that after reading your posts, i have felt more for nirmla as pitiable woman than to have sexual feels for her body curves.

It is indeed your style of writing that is making us feel so realistic, but would love to see this story on eXBii forum as the environment asks for.

Sorry once again ~ if i am not right with my selection of words...
Regards for your writing style... :salut:

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Hatts Off to you Shakespeare002,

a well balanced act of words. I have followed your story from post one... and indeed wanted to put one of your post as quote to this post, after reaching the last post. But just could not stop myself from dropping this post in between, after reading post of brijand.

I indeed love the theme; the concept & the subject of your story, but am not enjoying the sexual urge (dont misunderstood me as being impatient) the story name promises of. Instead i am really feeling pity for nirmla, the story is rotating around the theme of "what nirmla faces" but that is not what i am looking for. Sorry being a naive in writing, if i sound to be improper with selection of my words ~ But would really like to see this story to move around with sex in mind & not with the pain in heart. Repeatedly it has happened that after reading your posts, i have felt more for nirmla as pitiable woman than to have sexual feels for her body curves.

It is indeed your style of writing that is making us feel so realistic, but would love to see this story on eXBii forum as the environment asks for.

Sorry once again ~ if i am not right with my selection of words...
Regards for your writing style... :salut:
First of all, Thanx a lot bro for liking the theme and concept of the story. I am really delighted at your heartly comment.

I take it as success of the story if readers are feeling pity for the 'character' in the story.. Infact this is the sole aim of writing this story. You said (sorry if i'm mistaken) title indicates the story to be as erotic one. I don't think so bro.. Erotica might be there but will never be there as a tragedy nor i can describe rape.

You are right that this is an adult forum and people come here to search for some erotica. Yet I want to write this story and i have no better place to share my efforts. So i did it here only.
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Update likh rahe ho kya.
Agar theek na huye ho te koi load ni leni,kal aa javenga update-spdate.
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No problem Gurudev. U r more valauble for us than the story.
Take full rest and then come with a new energy to write the updates. Get well soon.
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this was never told that this story is not going to be an erotica story.. till now build up was like a erotic story .so i was expecting some erotic scenes. that's why i said to add little masala to every post.
and i never intended to hurt anyone's feeling here.. so if anyone is hurted ,,then m sorry for that
I know it bro that i did'nt mentioned mentioned anywhere that the story is not an erotica. Actually erotic incidents may be created with other characters in the story later on as i have not prepared the complete plot. But as far as the incident at which ur reply came asking for masala, was quite sensible and I was disturbed a bit after reading ur reply thinking if i am able to convey in right manner what i want to.

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koi baat nahi dpak bhai............update baad me de dena.........par nirmala ke sath aapne thik nahi kiya.........
Story line ki demand thi bhai :console:
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Deepak Bhai, your fan following is too high that we all always get to see conflict in the readers. It is a positive sign and shows love for you and your stories. Keep the spirit up and wish your fan following and readers mark increases every day.

This story is a heart renching and the story unfolds and speaks of how poorly Nirmala is treated. Reading this story is definitly a good story to read but a painful one. The title of story is 'Na,ri!' ~ Aurat ki vidambana! is the true story of such womens. Once you start reading its start realizing that this story is true! Once you begin - you can't put it down! The reader is taken through every possible emotion as they follow Nirmala's tales as this true story unfolds. However sadened you may feel reading this story it enlightens one to know how Womens are treated in India. How poor young innocent girls / womens like Nirmala are treated by men and are under men's authority in a contry such as India. This story is definitly worth reading. The greatest story that was ever told.

It is a emotional tale of a mother / wife and as a women and her love for her kid. I have so much admiration for Nirmala, to have the strength and courage to fight and bring at least a good life for her daughter given the circumstances she found herself in is just a miracle. I certainly wish I was as strong as her. After reading this story, I reflected on the life I lead, my troubles seem a mere blip compared to that of Nirmala.

Hats of to you Deepak Bhai...

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Deepak Bhai, your fan following is too high that we all always get to see conflict in the readers. It is a positive sign and shows love for you and your stories. Keep the spirit up and wish your fan following and readers mark increases every day.

This story is a heart renching and the story unfolds and speaks of how poorly Nirmala is treated. Reading this story is definitly a good story to read but a painful one. The title of story is 'Na,ri!' ~ Aurat ki vidambana! is the true story of such womens. Once you start reading its start realizing that this story is true! Once you begin - you can't put it down! The reader is taken through every possible emotion as they follow Nirmala's tales as this true story unfolds. However sadened you may feel reading this story it enlightens one to know how Womens are treated in India. How poor young innocent girls / womens like Nirmala are treated by men and are under men's authority in a contry such as India. This story is definitly worth reading. The greatest story that was ever told.

It is a emotional tale of a mother / wife and as a women and her love for her kid. I have so much admiration for Nirmala, to have the strength and courage to fight and bring at least a good life for her daughter given the circumstances she found herself in is just a miracle. I certainly wish I was as strong as her. After reading this story, I reflected on the life I lead, my troubles seem a mere blip compared to that of Nirmala.

Hats of to you Deepak Bhai... < image >< image >

Cheers,
Raaka,
Raaka Bhai,

Your replies are always like energy boosters of the writers here. Whenever I get a reply from you, I read it atleast twice or thrice to get the most from it.. And whenever I feel a lack of confidance/willingness, I search for your posts again in my story threads. Your Support is just awesome.

Thanx for being with us everytime we need.

Much more to tell in the story though not so tragic

Kindly keep coming
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jisko2 naari par essay copy karna hai kar lo........isse behtareen essay kabhi nahi milne wala..............

dpak bhai wat a gr8 writing.........aapki khasiyat rahi hai........flashback bhi sath me chalate ho.........

waiting for the next update...............
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