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Meri Behnen Meri Jindagi. completed



Guys ye meri pehli kosis hai story likhne ki to galtiyon ke liye pehle hi sorry aur kosis karunga ki galtiyon ko sudhar saku. Updates regular dene ki puri kosis hogi..
Here is the index...

Index
Introduction

Chapter 1- Arun, Uski Behnen aur Uske Man ki Awaz
Update 1--Update 2--Update 3
Chapter 2- First Sexual Encounter
Update 1--Update 2
Chapter 3- A Sister's Help
Update 1--Update 2--Update 3--Update 4
Chapter 4- The Fight
Update 1--Update 2--Update 3--Update 4
Chapter 5- The Dilemma
Update 1--Update 2--Update 3--Update 4--Update 5
Chapter 6- A Realization
Update 1--Update 2--Update 3--Update 4
Chapter 7- Not So Secret!!
Update 1--Update 2--Update 3
Chapter 8- Supriya's Gift
Update 1--Update 2
Chapter 9- Suprises..
Update 1--Update 2
Chapter 10- Koi Dekh Na Le!!
Update 1--Update 2
Chaper 11- Curiouser and Curiouser
Update 1--Update-2--Update-3
Chapter 12- The Plan
Update 1--Update 2
Chapter 13- Reality..
Update 1--Update 2
Chapter 14- The Bet
Update 1
Chapter 15- The Game Starts Now..
Update 1--Update 2--Update 3
Chapter 16- Who Wins the Bet?
Update 1--Update 2--Update 3--Update 4--Update 5
Chapter 17- Aftermath
Update 1--Update 2--Update 3--Update 4
Chapter 18- Payback Time!
Update 1--Update 2--Update 3--Update 4
Chapter 19- Girls Party.
Update 1--Update 2--Update 3
Chapter 20- Afterparty!
Update 1--Update 2
Chapter 21- Love is in the Air
Update 1--Update 2--Update 3--Update 4--Update 5
Chapter 22- The Plan
Update 1--Update 2--Update 3
Chapter 23- Double Date
Update 1--Update 2--Update 3--Update 4
Chapter 24- House Party
Update 1--Update 2--Update 3--Update 4--Update 5
Chapter 25- A Normal Day?
Update 1--Update 2--Update 3
Chapter 26- Yaadein
Update 1--Update 2--Update 3--Update 4--Update 5--Update 6--Update 7
Chapter 27- Payback
Update 1--Update 2--Update 3--Update 4--Update 5
Chapter 28- Camping
Update 1--Update 2--Update 3--Update 4
Chapter 29- Price of Secret
Update 1--Update 2--Update 3--Update 4--Update 5
Chapter 30- To A New Beginning
Update 1--Update 2--Update 3

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REVIEWS AND COMMENTS (THANKYOU READERS!)

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happy ending bhaiiiiiiii
story suru se lekar ant tak ek dhage me piroi hui rahi kanhi bhi aisa nahi laga ki kahani apne marg se hat rahi hai.
kuch bhi raha ho jahe sex ho ya emotions ya love , care ya kuchh bhi sab kuchh ek dam achhe se dhikhaya gaya aur likha gaya hai.....
aur jis tarah se soniya ne arun ke apartment ko sambhal ke rakh tha har ek chij ko bilkul waise hi jaisa arun chhod kar gaya tha It shows her love, care for him.
and last me arun soniya ek sath hai and baki teen me supriya to shadi ke liye taiyari bhi kar chuki hai and sneha she dates someone after all that. it's mean she is ready to commited for a relationship in future.and aarohi and arun are twins so aarohi is also with arun.........
and in last sentences it seems that arun accepted both soniya and aarohi.it's nice to see arun doing like this.....
thanks aayush bhai for giving us a such marvelous story.........................
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wow!!! story end bhi ho gya. exams ki wajah se cant be regular par story to khatm ho gya.....
well kisi ne sach hi kaha h all good things eventually come to an end.....
it was nice story and ending was really perfect. i mean Arun with Aarohi and Soniya but sneha ka kya.. wo akeli reh gyi...
An emotional ending to story.. but i think it was all a sudden end to story..... expected some more updates
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Superb story. Right from the beginning till the last 2 episodes the story was always on the right track. But in the last 2 episodes there was a bit of urgency to end the story. Between the 4 sisters love with arun, just to add my thoughts as a reader as you were describing your characters, from the younger ones

1) Soniya was not at all comfortable with arun until the club incident happened with her, so her love was a mere compensate type.
2) Aarohi was always arun's natural partner as she was the soulmate twin sis.
3) Sneha was thinking to be the arun's partner as soul searching experience and with lots of love and lust.
4) Supriya i think is the only sis who is comfortable with all the situations and everyone. She is also filled with love and lust but to a great extent looking after and supporting everyone in the house. So i think u should have linked supriya with arun to be there to support the whole family and all the 5 lived after happily ever after.
Anyway it's your story and you can end it on your terms but dil ko ek baat khatakti hai "" Supriya kisi aur ke saath"" "" Sneha akeli " aur yeh teeno apne josh mein. Jab aapko behanon se arun ko chudwana hi tha toh sirf dono se hi Q sabhi ka chodete. Supriya aur Sneha ne kya bigada tha.
But still enjoyed the story with daily updates. And also eagerly waiting for your next story which should also be i think about "INCEST". But please whatever you start to write please describe the real and never ending love between Bro-Sis.
Thank you for this "WONDERFUL" story. Dil se 'SHUKHARIYA'.
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done with all chapters....really very good one ....thanks for writing and sharing.....the commitment of Soniya and Aarushi was awesome....no words for them...though they fight more than any body else...still the bonding they develop was traffic.......once again......thanks for this creative work and more important....completing it........your commitment is commendable. \
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Chapter 10 Update 2 Done



You are so smooth silk with the flow... Aarohi has become my favorite.. Naughty and Hottie hehehe

A very simple story of love, selfless love of brother and his sisters.. Nothing new.. But hey, it's your words and style that are distinguishing this story from others.. The way u have described appearances of Aarohi, Supriya, Sneha and Soniya.. Those are way way beautiful.. Till now it's going great and pretty beautiful... Beautiful relation, beautiful description and ur narration... I am a Fan now
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Bet wala chapter done

Hero aur uski awaaz

Nice way of portraying his own emotions, we all have this inner voice in us, some hear it, some don't

Ab dekhna hai bet kaun jeetega, i guess with hotties around, Uski awaaz hi jeetegi, but uski awaaz jeetegi yaani arun khud jeetega.. Toh haarega kaun ? Koi nahin.. Simple hai
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Done with all updates..

Sabse pehle mazaa wahan kirkira hua jab Nisha aur uske bhai ki entry hui, i don't know wgt you messed up by bringing in new characters, har character ka importance hona chahiye, but here it was not so..

Jahan jahan Arun aur uski behnein aayi, wahan wahan emotions were at the peak
fir chaahe ho woh hospital wala scene ho ya camping wala, i liked sneha ka seduction in bathroom
Aarohi was impeccable, Sneha Supriya and Sonia were of no match to her, specially Sonia, every scene which u described as morning was beautiful unless sonia was mentioned there, so it was like a same routine, jahan woh ladki khud hi usse chipakti jaa rahi hai..
Supriya was proper, matured, elder and yet a friend to everyone

Mall wala scene, disco wala scene, the action as well was at the right time..
Slut friends as well , but they all were nicely mentioned, every pool scene was quite imaginable, hats off there

Ending...
Were you in hurry to finish this ? I mean ending theek thi, but achanak hi fast forward, behno ka jhagda fir arun ka padhne bahar jaana aur same update mein wapas bhi aa jana... It was all rushed up, thoda sa ek update dikha dete jisme behno ke jhagde hote toh it could have been wellt aken by readers and me as well... Us update se at least readers ko pata chalta ke aagey kya hoga, climax emerged out of the blues..

However, it was a very sweet and cute read, Sneha and Supriya and Aarohi have all kept ur option of writing a sequel if u wish..

A very nice and sweet read buddy..
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Aap kee story main khatam tu bohut pahlay kur chuka hun and such kahun tu i love to read it or aap say kuch new kee umeed hay sath sath aak baat ju aap ke story main dekhi ya aap kay way of writing main kay deep down you thenk INCEST is a curse. Pata nahi log yaha INCEST ko aak galazut aak burai kun sumjhty hay INCEST is a form of love and INCEST ke wajah say he yea dunya abad huwi hay incest is dunya main aak qanoon ke haseyat say zamanoo tuk raha hay any way INCEST is just a form of love or zarory nahi kay wo hur aak ko hoo jaha aapus ke mohabat hud say zyada huty jaty hay waha yea payda huta hay and INCEST love relation jub bunty hay tu wo sary umer kay leya huty hay or pher un main bahir ka kuch nahi huta hay. Ager aap ko maray baat main kuch kami lagay tu aap khud study kur loo dunya kay bohut baray baray mahereen NUFSEYAT ke book hay is pay any way just say kay please aap mazeed kahaneya lekhay yaha bohut see bohut sunder kahaneya adhory khaly paray hay please un pay kuch dheyan day and aap ke mazeed kahaneyo ka sedut say intezar hay
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Thanks bro for your detail and sweet Ans well i think you are right kay aap first time likh rahay thay tu hu sukta hay kay iysa feel huwa hay let me say yea feeling kisi aak cheez ko dekh kay nahi huwy its a what i say overall way main baat kahi and yes a am 100% with your thought and what you say about need filling sex base link without any deep love ok bro is forum pay bohut see mazeed kahaneya adhory pary hay aak name hay Zameer jis kay writer nay abhi us Thread ko bund keya hay and i hope kay aap wo kahani bohut sandar say likh sukty hu wo aak MOM Son base story hay jis ko writer abhi developed he kur raha tha but apnay kuch zati kaamo ke wajah say ab wo us kahani ko close kur deya hay so please is pay kuch dheyan day i hope kay aap kee likhi aak or sandar kahani purhnay ko melay gee see soon your new story and love your work please give some more
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Kamal ki story hai boss khaas kar Sneha aur Soniya ka character pasand aaya mujhe ayushrocks to you
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Bahut khub bhau....

Lajawab... Gajab... Shandaar.... Superb.... Great....

Start me jab maine start kiya to laga ki koi bhai bahan ki adultery story hogi....
But jab 4-5 update read kiye to story me full on emotions dekh kar dang rah gaya.... Or apne aap ko aage padhne se rok nahi paya....

Bahut hi jabardast ja rahe ho bhai....

Abhi 4th chapter me hu.....jald hi Complete karta hu...
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Chapter 16 Completed....



Maza aa gaya bhau..... Bahut shandaar likhte ho....

Ye hi fantasy hai apni shayad.....

Bechare arun ki to 12 baja di..... Arohi to kuch jyada hi maze le rahi hai....

Dhere dhere sneha bhi arun ke karib aa rahi hai.... Bach kr rahna re baba bach ke rehna re....
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End was different..... I mean I couldn't expected this one...

Fir bhi ye bahut shandaar tha....

Story me kaafi kuch aisa tha jo ki fabulous, shandaar, dhamakedar, superb, unexpected..... Or pata nahi kya kya tha...

Jab rohit and nisha wala chapter maine read kiya to maine socha ki is baat ka Arun and his sisters par koi effect nahi padne wala...

But shayad us baat ka hi ye natija hua ki uski dono elder sisters kisi dusre ke sath committed ho gayi ya ho sakti thi....

Arohi and soniya was acted superb.... Last update was awesome as I think before....

I think ki tum is story ko Restart kar sakte ho.... Ek naye sire se.... Jo ki shayad possible hai.... And I think readers bhi ise pasand karenge....

So at the end.... Story was superb..... I completed 6-8 times....

for this fabulous job....
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Hye Bro.
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Heartly Congrulations for completion of such a Masterpiece..........

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I am very lucky to read it.......really it was outstanding from Dawn to Dusk.........
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Keep it up bro

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bhai just 10 minutes more..
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Chapter 3

CHAPTER 3
UDPATE 1

"Wow.." Bas itna hi Supriya ke muh se nikal paaya..
"Wow..."


Arun teji se bHAGkar apne room me pahuncha aur sochne laga is condition se bahar kaise aaya jaye.
Ek to uska hathiyar shant hone ka naam nhi le rha tha. To usne apne drawer se lotion nikala aur ek kapda ko kandhe par dalkar muth marne laga.
Pehle to porn ko yaad krne laga par jab usse fayda nhi hua to fir Soniya ke bare me sexy batein sochne laga. Uske man me dikhayi dene laga Soniya apne sexy chikne doodhon par tel masal rhi hai. Uske doodh bilkul safed, condar hai. Chote chote halke pink rang ke nipple aur sath me wo apne dono hathon se ubko masal rhi hai nipples ko khinchkar unhe masal rhi hai aur sath me halki halki aahein uske gale se bahar aa rahi hain..

"oh soniya..soniyaa...soniya" bas yahi rag alapta ja rha tha.

"Arunn.."

Arun ke hath ek dam ruk gaye. Use yad aaya ki wo apne room ka darwaja lock krna bhool gaya tha. Uski peeth darwaje ki taraf hai...

"Shit...Shit...Shit" Arun man me sochta hai ye to Supriya di ki awaz hai..

"Arun tum thik ho...idhar dekho.." Supriya aage badhke uske kandhe par hath rakhte hue kehti hai.

"hmm" Arun bina palte jawab deta hai..
"Maine kaha idhar dekho.." Supriya ek tarike se order dete hue uske kandha apni taraf kheenchti hai..
Arun apna lund hath me liye apni supriya di ke samne palatata hai uski ankhen band hain..
Supriya jaise hi ye dekhti hai wo thoda piche hat jati hai..

"Main..m..main.." Arun ke muh se sharm ke karan shabd nhi nikalte aur ankhen band hi rkhta hai..lekin usne apne hathon se jeans aur boxer upar chadha leta hai.

"Sweetu .. Embarass hone ki jarurat nhi hai...ye to normal chiz hai.. main bhi krti hun halanki tumhare jitna nhi aur na hi main apni behnon ke bare me sochti hun ye krte waqt.." Supriya bade pyar se dilasa dete hue boli..
Ab to arun aur jyada sharm se gada chala jata hai...
Arun ka pura chehra laal ho chuka hai. Uski icha ho rhi ki bas abhi dharti fat jaye aur wo usme sama jaye.

"Bhai kuch to bolo.."

"Kya bolu. Aaj to sahi me jindagi ka sabse bekar din hai. Pehle niche tumhare sath wo...aur ab tumne mujhe masturbate krte hue pakd liya wo bhi apni hi behn ko imagine krte hue..."Aisa lag raha tha jaise Arun bas rone hi wala ho.

"I am sorry...maine tumhe niche kapde utarne ko majboor kiya jiske karan..." Supriya boli..

"Jiske karan tumhare muh mera wo takra gaya..."arun rundhi si awaz me bola.

"Shh...main gussa nhi hun sweetu.." Supriya pyar se boli. "Can we talk? Tum shayad thoda acha mehsus karoge..."

"Isse badhiya main apne aap ko kisi kothri me band kr lunga..." Arun aankhen niche kre kre hi bola..

"Waise tum ye krte wqt apni behen ko kyu yaad kr rhe the??"

"Mujhe khud nhi pta dim mujhe kya ho gaya hai. Aaj subah se kuch jyada hi jaise mera climax hone wala tha ek dam se image aa gayi mere man me.." Arun dusri taraf muh krke bola..Tab tak arun bed par aur supriya samne kursi par baith jati hai.

"To kaun thi wo? Sneha.." Supriya ne badi utsukta ke sath pucha..

"Soniya..." Arun bahut dheeme se bolkar supriya ki taraf dekhne lagta hai...

tbc...

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