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jee le zara ek acha sandesh deti hui behad sundar kahani hai. kahani ki naayika....jo ki apne vivahit jeevan se santusht nahi rehti hai, sab kuchh hote hue bhi uski zindagi niras hoti hai. aise mein uske ghar kaam karne wali naukrani ka sampark use jeene ka naya dhang sikhata hai aur phir se uske sune jeevan mein khushiyan bhar deta hai.

kahani behad simple hai, lekin writer ne jis khubsurti se likha hai ki dil par chhap chhod jaati hai. kahani mein kahin bhi koi galti nahi dikhai di. exbii mein inka safar bahut lamba hai. best of luck bro.
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Review: Jee Le Zara by dreamer_1214u

A wonderful story touching the life of a housewife and the dilemmas she faces in her life and the way she was able to get back the attention of her husband by bringing out some changes in herself.
A nicely written captivating story,with a smooth transition from one scene to another,and with a nice dose of erotica in it.Moreover, this story gives out an important message to all the housewives facing similar dilemmas in their life by encouraging them to: "Jee Le Zara" by bringing out some changes to themselves,instead of giving up or taking some wrong step.
Overall, a very nice attempt,with a nice plot and a dose of erotica.Keep it up,dreamer bro.All the best..
JFH bro for liking the attempt. sometimes it is so difficult to write a simple story coz a lot of ideas keep coming while writing and there is always a crave to write something different but I am glad that I could stick to the simple theme.

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Review : Socha na tha by Ravi Vyas

Good flow and language. Starts well with a story line which looks promising. The best part is the blowjob one which is damn errotic.

But the story does not look complete as the end is sudden. Seems like word limit was the issue. The title also is not going very well. I feel that it was a long story and the complete story is not communicated in the required word count. Good attempt though.

my rating : 6/10

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Review : Train ka Safar aisa bhi by Harshit


This is the most common fantasy whenever we travel by train. But it is enjoyable everytime. Harshit bhai has written a story. Enjoyed reading it as it had a flavour of comedy too along with errotica.
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Review : dhokebaaz Duniya by Reet

Though a disqualified story due to word limits , still writing review as I had read it and it is

Good start. Heroin ka pehla vivaran hi pad ke mazaa aa jata hai. Punjabi bride wo bhi towel me

Blackmailing stories are usualy not sensual but Reet ji ke experienced writing aur selected words bahot hi jabardast hai. End me message bhi hai par shayad wo part na hota to story word limit se bahar na jaati.

Overall, a good read. Punjabiyaan di shaan vakhri

my rating : 7/10.

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The story starts with a bang and narration is of top notch. It has the perfect flow which makes it easy to read and Ending has also justified the title. Only loose part is that the erotic scene seems to be a little misfit in the story but one can see that it is an erotic story contest. Overall a well written story carrying a deep message. Good Luck Brother
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Review: Majboor Baap ki Majboor (Chudakkad) Beti

The start of the story gave me an impression that i am about to read some kind of thriller. But it turned out to be a non-stop erotic ride. But one thing was bit confusing that why everyone was so afraid of SP. If SP's were so powerful they must have been the biggest rapists in the world. Anyways the erotica was mind blowing and the detail with which the writer explained all the moves was steaming hot.

The language of the story was superb, also the flow and narration was almost perfect. A very good effort and Best of Luck Bro
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story looks promising right from the start

command on the language is very well that even i ve felt envy about it

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in the start its looks like a typical bollywood story. Two unknown people meeting in a railway station and finally fell in love with each other. But no, there was a surprise factor in the end. Thats convert this average story into a very good story. Writer's command on language is very good. Erotic part was very nicely written. Best of luck to writter
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Ye story hai meri aur meri cousin bhabhi ki. Meri bhabhi ka nam megha&nbsp; wo thodi rani mukarji jasi lagati hai . Mera hamesha se us par chrush tha or mai hamesha unhe chudne ke sapne dekhta tha.Waise main bahot hi shy person hun, kisi naye person se jaldi mix nahi ho pata, lekin time jate-jate meri aur unki dosti achi ho gai. Aur maine kai baar unke undergarments ko sunga hai aur muth mari hai.
Mai apne bare mai to bata deta hoon mera naam rahulk hai mai Haryan se hoon or mere lund ka size 11&Prime; hai lekin thoda patla hai . meri height 6 foot 1&Prime; hai or thoda sa mota hoon. apko mujhe mail karna ho to is mail id pe main milunga apke mail ka main wait karunga.
Apko mera pehla sex experience batata hu jab mai 18 saal ka tha.mai padahi me bahot accha tha 10 tak lekin jab mai 11 th me aya tab muje sex ki bahot icha hoti thi.uss time se maine blue film dekhna start kia aur muth marna bhi.
Mera dhyan padhai ki jagah baki chizo mai jyada tha islye mai 12 mai fali hogya tha or phir mai apne papa ke sath bus ka kam karne laga tha hamari 40 badi bus or 20choti bus hai.mai apni bhabhi ke ghar kafi ata jata tha kyoki meri maa ki death ho chuki thi or hamara khana bhabhi ke ghar se ata tha phele hum hotel se khana le kar ate the magar jab se bhai ki sadi ho gayi tab se bhabhi hamare liye khana bana ti hai
Mai hamesha se bhabhi se kahi achi thraha se bate karta hoon isliye bhabhi mujhe kafi sarif samjh ti hai lekin mai hoon to pura haram kor bhabhi ko hemesha galt najar se dekh ta hoon.meri bhabhi ki sadi ko ab 8 saal ho chuke hai or unke 2 bache bhi hai.Ab mai apni kahani shuru karta hu bina time waste kie ek din Bhabhi kapde sukha rahi thi ghar pe koi nhi tha Bhabhi ne mujhe unki help karne k lie bulaya mai unki help kar raha tha kapde dene me itne me mere hath unki bra or panty aa gai maine bhabhi se anjan bante hue pucha &ldquo;ye kiska hai bhabhi&rdquo; to bhabhi kehti &ldquo;chall badmash idhar de ye meri kachi hai&rdquo; mujhe sab pata tha magar mai Unse maze le raha tha fir maine bra dikhate hue pucha ye kya hai to unhone kaha &ldquo;ye meri banayan hai pehnega kya?&rdquo; unka ye answer sun kar mujhe hansi aa gai fir uske thodi der baad bhabhi mutne gai
Bhabhi k bathroom k darwaza niche se thoda upar hai to mujhe jab unke mutne ki awaz suni maine jhuk kar dekha unhone yellow color ki panty pehni hui thi or unki chut pe thode thode Baal the mera land to khada hi hogya bamboo ki tarah. kuch hi aisa hi chala bhabhi roz kapde sukhane k bahane mujhse sexy baate karti thi ek din to jab unhone mera kacha(underwear) dekha to boli k &ldquo;jab mai ise dho rahi thi isme se badbu aa rahi thi tu abhi bhi kya susu kar dta hai raat ko&rdquo;
Maine bhi unse pange lete hue kaha aap ise kyu sung rahi thi? vo has k chup ho gai Fir ek din bhai bahar chale gae yani punnjab kuch dino k lie ab bhabhi ghar me akele thi to bhabhi ne mujhe raat ko apne ghar sulaliya. agle din jab mai utha tab bhabhi mut rahi thi or unka door lock nhi tha jo mujhe pta tha magar main bhola or bathroom me ghus gya mujhe dekhte hi bhabhi
Khadi ho gai shock se or unka sara mut unki nighty pe gir gya o mujhe kene lagi &ldquo;tu yaha kya kar raha hai dikhta nhi Main mut rahi hu&rdquo; to maine kaha darwza band rakhna chahie tha na mujhe kya koi sapne aaya hai . phir bhabhi chali gayi or dosto yaha se humare relation me change aaya . bhai do tin din or nahi ane wala tha ab mere maan mai bhabhi ko chodne ke bare mai aayi .or mai ab uunke ghar pe hi rheta kyoki papa ne kaha tha jab tak tera bhai na aye tab tak tu bhabhi ke sath rahe ga
Ab to meri nikal padi thi lekin mujhe kya pata tha ki bhabhi ke maan bhi yehi sab chal raha hai.lunch k baad bhabhi ko pata nhi kya ho gya tha mere pass aa kar let gai or kehne lagi chal truth and dare.Khelte hai maine kaha thik hai pehle to hum normally khelte rahe tabhi bhabhi ne kaha jaybir maza nhi aa raha kuch naya karte hai itna kehte hi unhone pen ko spin kardia pen mere pass aa kar ruk gya maine dare manglia unki aankho me shaitan tha
Unhone mujhe kaha chal apna kacha utar k nanga baith k khel or agar nhi karega to mai tere chutado(hips) pe 10thapad marungi . mai soch mai pad gya phir mujhe lag ki bhabhi mera lund dekhna chati hai or mai Game me nanga baitha or mera lund khada tha dosto mera luck ab acha chalne laga or pen bhabhi ke pass jakar ruk gya bhabhi ne dare manga . to mine soch ne laga ki bhabhi se kya kar wa sakta hoon thabhi mane bhabhi ki taraf dekha
To wo mere lund ki taraf dekh rahi thi mane soch ki kyo na bhabhi se apna lund suck karene ko kahu or mane bhabhi se kha ki mera lund suck karo to jese wo iis ke liye ek dum tayar thi or mere khete ke sath hi mere lund ko suck karne lagi .phir jab tak mera pani nahi nikla wo mere lund ko suck karti rahior mera sara pani pe gayi .<br />
Phir mane kaha ab kya ab or khelna hai tp bhabhi boli ki ab bache school se ane wale hai raat ko khele ge.Raat ke 10 baj chuke the tabhi bhabhi ne kaha tu kaha soyega maine kaha jaha sota hu wahi par so jaunga.wo boli nahi aaj tere bhai bhi nahi hai mujhe dar lagega.ek kaam kar mare sath soja aaj.fir hum sone chala gaye.bhabhi ke dono bache so rahe the to bhabhi ne kaha ki hum ek hi rajai ke ander so jate hai or bache alag bed pe so rahe the or hum alag thodi der baad mari bhabhi karwat lekar so gayi aur unki gand mere lund k pas toch kia.Muje bhi acha lag raha tha mera lund bada hota gaya aur unki gand me chubane laga.bhabhi ko bhi maza aa raha tha wo aur piche ayi aur haskar boli tu toh bada ho gaya hai.muje yah shabd sunkar hairani hoyi.unhone mera lund mere pajame k upar se pakad liya aur sehlane lagi aur dhire se ander hath dal diya aur boli niche k baal nahi kate kya kabhi .
Maine kaha 2 mahino se shaving nahi ki.woh mare lund ko ab ander se sehlari thi aur mai unke boobs ko zor se daba raha tha.meri bhabhi ne ab mera pajama pura utar diya tha.ab mai unke samne pura nanga tha.woh boli tera to bhot bada hai.itni umar me itna bada kaise kia. bhabhi boli tuje maine muth marte hue dekha tabhi socha tera lund 1 baar to lena hai.thabi to maine tere sath game khele ne ke bare me socha tha.phir manie bhabhi ka figure pucha to wo boli 38 34 40.
Unki komal ungliya mera lund k upar ghim rahi thi fir unhone mera lund muh me le liya aur chusne lagi.sirf 10 min hue thi k maine apna pani unke muh me chhod dia.woh mera sara pani ander pi gayi.maine kaha sorry wo boli koi baat nahi pehli baar aisa he hota hai pani nikalne k baad bhi mera lund khada tha yeh dekhkar bhabhi khush hui
Aur boli tu aisa kya khata hai.tere bhai to kuch nahi karta lund bhi unka kamzor hai.maine kaha kaise hai.woh boli 4.5 inch ka hai aur patla hai.teri tarah 10,11 inch wala lund he meri pyas bujha saktha hai.mai unke upar aagya aur bhot badi lip kiss ki.unke honth bhi soft mote the.fir unke boobs ko Choos raha tha.muje aisa lag raha tha k koi tarbooj mere hath me ho itne bade the.unko 5 min tak hatho se masal raha tha. Bhabhi ne muje chut chat ne ko bola aur boli use pura muh me le lene.unki chut pe bhot bade baal the.maine pucha aap ne shaving nahi ki wo boli kya kiske liye karu .tere bhai ki night duty hoti hai aur din ko woh sote hai.sex hamare bech 2 mahino me 1 baar hota hoga. mane unki chut ko shave karne ke bare mai puch to wo boli ki tu mari shave bana de mai teri shave banadeti hoon .
Maae kaha thik hai phir hum dono ne ek dusre ki shave bana de or un ki chut jab saaf ho gayi to ek dum sundar lag rahi thi phir mai unki chut chatna shuru kia woh zor se aahh aaah.ki siskiya le rahi the.unki chut se pani nikal raha tha.5 min tak chatne k bad bhi boli aur chat ise.tab muje laga masi me bhot sex hai.woh boli ander dal apna lund aur raha nahi jara.maine bhabhi ki ankho ko dekha wo ek dum nasheeli ho gayi thi.
Maine jaise thoda ander dala woh aaaaah Ki zoro se sanse le rahi thi.is time unki ankhe bandh thi jase hi mane apna pura lund andar dala bhabhi tadap ne lagi or boli ki bhar nika nahi to mai mar jaugi bhabhi chiki nahi kyo ki bache uth jate phir mai ruck gaya or lip pe kiss karne lag 5 min baad jab bhabhi ka dard kum howa to mane dake dene suru kar diye.
Aur zor se dhakka dene laga.meri bhabhi meri kamar aur baalo pe hath guma rahi thi.15 min tak maine bhabhi ki chut mari aur is doraan bhabhi ek bar pani nikal chuka tha or phir mere sath apna pani bhi nikal diya aur 2 min tak aise he unke upar leta hua thaa.thodi der bad bhabhi boli 69 karte hai
Maine kaha kya hota hai.,bhabhi boli tu let ja mai tere upar ati hu.meri gand tere muh k upar hogi aur mera muh tere lund ki aur.hum 69 ki positon me agaye unki moti gand mere muh k upar thi.mai unki chut ko chat raha tha aur woh mare lund ko chhoss rahi thi.maine 1 ungli unki gand me dali.muje bahot maza aya gand ka hole ek dum rubber ki tarah lag raha tha.bahot soft tha.
Tabhi maine socha kyuna bhabhi ki gand mari jaye.maine bhabhi ko gand marne k liye bola tab unhone kaha piche bahot dard hota hai.maine pucha bhai ne kabhi pichi kia hai kya/woh boli 1 baar try kia tha par ander nahi jara tha aur dard ho rahA tha.maine kaha dheere dheere dalunga.
Woh man gayi fir maine unhe ghodi banaya aur dalna chaha par ander ja nahi raha tha.tabhi bhabhi boli vaseline ya tel lagakar dal tabhi jayega.tabhi mai dusre room se bajaj almond oil layA aur thoda unki gand pe lagaya aut thoda apna lund pe.fir jaise maine thoda dhhaka dia mera adha lund unki gand ko fadhte hua ander gaya.
Bhabhi zor se chillai aaahh..ahha.boli bahar nikal.maine kaha please 2 minute bas.muje itna acha lag raha tha k bahar nikalne ki icha nahi ho rahi the.maine kaha thada si der dard hoga baad me apko bhi maza ayega.aur unki gand marne laga bhabhi ki gand mane 1 min hi mari thi ki mara pini nikal gaya. our mai bhabhi k upar se hat gaya .
Bhabhi boli tera lund bahot tagda hai.hum bathroom me safai karne gaye aur fir bed pe agaye.ab bhabhi ne nujhe ghoda banne ko kaha.fir me ghoda bana aur bhabhi mere gand ko chat rahi thi.mujhe bhi bhot maza ane laga.5 min tak bhabhi ne meri gand ko chata aur fir ulta leta diya.ab bhabhi meri gand k upar unke boobs ragad rahi thi.maine socha sex me aisa sab bhi hota hai.phir mai bhabhi ki lipstic uthkar laya aur phir maine bhabhi ki chut mai lund dala bhabhi phir se boli aaahhhhhh maie kuch nahi kiya aur bhabhi ke lips per lipstic laga kar unhe chusne laga thodi der baad bhabhi ne neeche se apni gaand hilyai to mai uper se dhakke marne laga bhabhi aaahhhh dheere aaa judli juldi aurrrrrr aaa maja aa raha haiii aaaammyaaaaur wo neeche se apni gaand utha rahi thi to mai. Ruk gaya bhabhi boli kya hua to maine kaha aap kar rahi na to bhabhi ne kaha juldi juldi karo mai phir suru ho gaya bhabhi aahhhhha aur wo shant ho gayi per mera abhi nikla nahi tha to bhabhi boli mai ho gayi hato lag rahi hai lekin me dhakke de raha to aur kaha aap to ho gayi mai nahi aur ye kahate huye bhabhi phir se gaaand utane lagi ulti siddi aabajo ke saath aur hum doni saath mai jad gaye maine bhabhi ko raat mai teen baar choda or chudai kate huye subh
Ke 4 baj gaye phir min aur bhabhi thodi der aise hi ek duse ke saath pade rahe aur phir maine bhabhi ko kareeb pehli baar 10 minute aur dusri baar15-20 minute choda bhabhi ne kaha subh ho gayi tum soo jaao nahi to subha tumhare papa puche gay ki raat may soye nahi to kya kho gay maine kaha bhabhi kesa laga to bhabhi ne kaha aaj muje alag hi maja aaya to maine kaha ise baar apko mera lun chusna padega bhabhi ne kaha thik hai abhi soo jaao mai bhabhi ko lips kis dekar soo gagya app ko meri kahani kessi lagi batana jarur .
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